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A Piece of Advice..!

by Mohamed Javith

Final Rating: 6.80. Finished #6 out of 211 entries.

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Animator

Mohamed Javith

Experience

3

Time Taken

10 days

Description

An old man's advice on finding the better half..

Comments

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philipp seis

Good stuff in there ! Authentic situation ! The hand accent on exactly looks a little like poking.

David BESNIER

very good timing !

Aaron Rivera

I watched this over and over again and can't find a single flaw, nor can I find missing details or a single unnatural movement. As far as I'm concerned, you've earned these 11 stars.

Mahesh Waran

we have a wizard here!! cage him!!

Josh Wood

nice use of operative words, he doesnt really move like an old person though so keep in mind the characteristics of a person and how they would dictate how a person would move
nice work though!

Seyed Emad Karimifard

I like your idea.
This animation is the best so far.

Jakub Pazera

Just a little note. Overall it feels like the character has too much energy for someone older with a cane.
The body arc at the head of the shot is especially big. The point with the cane feels forced, not natural. I would have the character sit back as you have it, on "for exactly what you are" it would feel more like the character you are trying to sell, calm and collected. There is a glitch with the hand when he brings back the cane after the point. Also the hand gesture on "the best thing you can do" appears just a tiny bit too big. You did a nice gesture with the right hand on frame 140, you should have continued this natural feel with the hand gestures I mentioned above. For the most parts the actions feel natural. Nice.

Merlyn Moynagh

great job! movement is very subtle, love how his hand moves the cane when it goes up in the air, great feeling of weight there. Very nice.

Diane Aarts

great, love the action with the cane as well. :)

Kai Huai

Good shot! I think overall is nicely execute!It will be greaatttt.. if you can flavoured the acting so that it does not look too generic. Love the point he look at the picture. Maybe you can think about how to incorporate him and his wife into this whole shot, it will give his acting more personification! Let say.. start the shot with him putting the picture down.. and let him do a little more inflections about his own love.. ;) Another thing is, the head and hand gestures is hitting right on the dialouge. Play with the overlap and it will look more organic! Gggrrreeat!! :)