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hungry
by Xieyushani
A college student studying animation for three years
2 weeks
We can help each other and don't always let me do the whole thing myself ok？
Comments
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Ben Zingo
there's some nice things here, but your characters feel very wobbly, and there's just too many actions. You don't need them to gesture for every line of dialogue! I think you could benefit a lot from shooting reference footage of yourself acting out the scene, and limit yourself to whatever actions feel natural. Sometimes less is more!
Michael D. Smith
Some good bits, but I think the "bobblely" motion of the characters was very distracting. Rather than flowing from one thing to the next it felt too much like do action A and then action B. Smoothing transitioning "through" all the actions would help a lot.
Jesus Porcel
Try to avoid so much movement in the characters
Heiner
Limb movements seem to be too exaggerated and make the scene very restless
Tom S
Not sure what the story is, why the one character is idling by the shelves versus entering the room..while the other character was in the kitchen.
Martin Miljkovic
Too much movement on character standing. Less is more.