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Drama

by Sankeerna y

Final Rating: 4.08. Finished #108 out of 162 entries.

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Animator

Sankeerna y

Experience

1 year

Time Taken

2 days

Description

grandpa giving lecture to tired warrior

Comments

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James Van Dam

I like your setting and the black and white ascetic, but you should be more zoomed on your talking character. I can barley see his face/movements.

Casey Colledge

Would be nice to see a close up of the guy talking. Right now it's hard to tell who is speaking and what is going on.

Ryan D Lowe

This whole shot would work sooo much better if you reversed angles on the character. Have the main character be front to camera, and have the soldier screen right with the same motions. It would read a lot better! Main character goes rigid stiff after F102

Richard Clark

You need to pull the camera in so that we can see the performance better

Eshan

The character is way too far from camera.. can barely see him