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Superheroine counselling
A therapist is tells a superheroine he cannot continue to enable her
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Pauline Champetier
Try to act your scene out before getting started. What does your character on the right want ? If he feels comfortable and is going to put one leg on top of the other and lie back, why making him go forward and then back again ? he would probably rather lean even more back in the armchair, if he feels that much in power and wants to be comfy.
Dalton Krajewski
The actions were very expressive and ambitious, but some of the transitions seemed pretty linear, so emphasizing the arcs and lettings the actions flow through into each other would really help this feel more organic.