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Finally Going Out
by Lee
After personal troubles Mery is ready to go back to socialising.
Comments
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Moby
Camera moves a little strict. Good effort.
ben malberg
The pose in the beginning is really appealing, it grabbed my attention. The pose at f113 she looks evil there, I don't know if that was your intention or not but it caught my eye. The jump up is too fast I think, need some more time because of her mass. And after the jump the forward momentum suddenly disappears which I thought could use some more tuning. I think I saw your earlier submission on the forum, it's making progress. :)
Brent Forrest
Overacting
Niya
really like the slide down the chair
Amartya Mukherji
Needs a lot of improvement
Benjamin Berg
Here are a couple of notes and I hope it helps.
1. Your character feels very stiff.
2. The feel could use a polish pass.
3. Too many camera changes!
Good luck!