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The Effect..
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[deleted user]
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3 weeks
The effect of divorce.
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Zoe Piel
Very strange
Erin Goddard
the story line is a bit confusing. for example, how does he know that she isn't wearing her ring if she is wearing gloves? focus on keeping it simple.
Brad Bradbury
all the inter-cutting is distracting.
The pink girl bear crying about the paper is really not needed.
Johann Wong
This needs more spine movements / curvature, looks stiff with just the arms doing the most work. The characters could use some lower eyelid animation to boost the overall expression. Nice try, btw! ;)
Sparky L-Maxwell
That idea is super creative. You took the sound and created a completely different kinda story. I love it.
Jordan Lewers
Interesting concept, but it seems to be too elaborate for its own good. From what I gather, the human kid's parents are having an actual divorce, and the kid is projecting the events onto her dolls. That's a pretty difficult subject to convey in 25 seconds, and unfortunately, most people might not get that on multiple viewings.
Objects are undefined and too similar to each other to suggest different scenes. Was the child bear supposed to be in another room, or in the same room listening to her parents? It was hard to tell not only because the rooms were similar, but also because the staging of the child was off. Even though the child motions to the dresser from the right, she continues to the right by frame 394, past her dresser. Where is the child bear's dresser when everything is revealed to be a play? Since the mother and child bears are also too similar, the situation becomes even more confusing. In the future, I would plan out your interiors before finalizing your animation.





