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Treasure Map
by Neil Jia
Treasure Map : ]
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Cameron
Very nice animation. Overall could be a little shorter.
Davit Martirosyan
500 frames befor animation? is it joke????((((((((((
Brian Heath
i had an episode from the flashing...it was a bit distracting, rest of the animation was good though
Sam H
I think the build up could have been shorter but the work itself was excellent
April Slocombe
I like the flythrough from the photographic exterior and the idea of the men looking at a treasure map but the intro before the dialogue is a bit too long for my tastes. Other than that, good lip sync, poses and facial animation throughout the dialogue.
Jon Coppock
Nice story telling concept, a little overdone on the flash sequence, I would say to trust the viewer a little more, trust in thier ability to get the picture with less information. Lip sync a little off on STREAMS.
Derek Stewart
Cool idea! Really like the build up. Needs a bit more polish, particularly in the lip sync and staging, but it's a great start to a shot that has a lot of potential!
Mervyn Le MandarinOrange
The lip sync for the old guy is abit off.. Love the story!!
Jan Abero
Dude....how long did it take to just think this out? That's impressive.
Zoe Piel
Too floaty.
Akshay De
you put too much work and time into a silent part that ended up slow and boring. you could have improved a lot on the actual clip
Kristin Turnipseed
Very nice, although the lip sync on the older character could use some work.
Jaime Colque
long :/
Abby Ng
Your animation is really nice but you might need to cut it short to 11 sec since that was the main point of this competition.
PRIYA RANJAN DEB
I thought its in short film category. but good story.
Karine Couture Bienvenue
The camera need a bit of improvement, it kinda jumps all over the place. Other than that, great job!
Blond
Nice job bro. The arm movement at 710 was kinda stiff. Clean them curves!
Jayvon Gomes
haha this short clip is very cinematic. Nicely done, I would have worked more on the lip sync though. especially the "Don't cross the streams" part. you didn't make the "Mm" motion with the lips
Pauras chaudhari
Too long the same message can be registered in less time too.
Eric Buval
I would've said that this one was #1 but that ending had some odd timings :c. The whole body moves in one direction then abruptly moves in another around frame 711which is totally unnatural. Also the lips never meet on the old guy when he says streaMMMs. Maybe you didn't get to finish. Because there are other mistakes like the old guy's stiff fingers and the buff guy's nod looks like his neck broke
Linh Diep
Camera work and lip dialogue could be improved but it helped definitely with the narrative! Very nice facial work! Strong parts for me the beginning of the when the old man starts talking
Craig P. Smith
Very nice face and mouth movements on the red-haired guy. (Reminds me of Roark in Disney's Atlantis). No so impressed with the blonde character's lip-sync. You definately need to emphasize the "M" in streams for him.





