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Treasure Map

by Neil Jia

Final Rating: 6.01. Finished #14 out of 169 entries.

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Animator

Neil Jia

Experience

1~2years

Time Taken

1 week

Description

Treasure Map : ]

Comments

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Cameron

Very nice animation. Overall could be a little shorter.

Davit Martirosyan

500 frames befor animation? is it joke????((((((((((

Brian Heath

i had an episode from the flashing...it was a bit distracting, rest of the animation was good though

Sam H

I think the build up could have been shorter but the work itself was excellent

April Slocombe

I like the flythrough from the photographic exterior and the idea of the men looking at a treasure map but the intro before the dialogue is a bit too long for my tastes. Other than that, good lip sync, poses and facial animation throughout the dialogue.

Jon Coppock

Nice story telling concept, a little overdone on the flash sequence, I would say to trust the viewer a little more, trust in thier ability to get the picture with less information. Lip sync a little off on STREAMS.

Derek Stewart

Cool idea! Really like the build up. Needs a bit more polish, particularly in the lip sync and staging, but it's a great start to a shot that has a lot of potential!

Mervyn Le MandarinOrange

The lip sync for the old guy is abit off.. Love the story!!

Jan Abero

Dude....how long did it take to just think this out? That's impressive.

Zoe Piel

Too floaty.

Akshay De

you put too much work and time into a silent part that ended up slow and boring. you could have improved a lot on the actual clip

Kristin Turnipseed

Very nice, although the lip sync on the older character could use some work.

Jaime Colque

long :/

Abby Ng

Your animation is really nice but you might need to cut it short to 11 sec since that was the main point of this competition.

PRIYA RANJAN DEB

I thought its in short film category. but good story.

Karine Couture Bienvenue

The camera need a bit of improvement, it kinda jumps all over the place. Other than that, great job!

Blond

Nice job bro. The arm movement at 710 was kinda stiff. Clean them curves!

Jayvon Gomes

haha this short clip is very cinematic. Nicely done, I would have worked more on the lip sync though. especially the "Don't cross the streams" part. you didn't make the "Mm" motion with the lips

Pauras chaudhari

Too long the same message can be registered in less time too.

Eric Buval

I would've said that this one was #1 but that ending had some odd timings :c. The whole body moves in one direction then abruptly moves in another around frame 711which is totally unnatural. Also the lips never meet on the old guy when he says streaMMMs. Maybe you didn't get to finish. Because there are other mistakes like the old guy's stiff fingers and the buff guy's nod looks like his neck broke

Linh Diep

Camera work and lip dialogue could be improved but it helped definitely with the narrative! Very nice facial work! Strong parts for me the beginning of the when the old man starts talking

Craig P. Smith

Very nice face and mouth movements on the red-haired guy. (Reminds me of Roark in Disney's Atlantis). No so impressed with the blonde character's lip-sync. You definately need to emphasize the "M" in streams for him.