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consciousness

by Bikram barman

Final Rating: 5.01. Finished #46 out of 310 entries.

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Animator

Bikram barman

Experience

two and a half years

Time Taken

two weeks after work.

Description

Mother and Daughter having a normal drink(juice),the color of the drink make the daughter little curious to know what is it.

Comments

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Ramon Arango

focal point in the first seconds for me is the bottom of the glass in the mothers hands. try picking a camera angle so that the girl is surrounded by the windows in the background giving her more contrast and therefore focus and interest. And if you do these overshoulder shots dont make the foreground character take up that much screenspace, and dont put the other character right in the middle. but more space between them.

Sabrina Winkel

Good scenery, great story line, good acting, well done!!

Ed Purves

Mathilda!! Nice :D

Fernando Incetta

Good idea overall, try to rely less on the automated splines and work more on your pose-to-pose. Good luck.

Gaucelm De Villaret

Could work... but the movements go a bit too slow... with more focused speed and energy, it'd be even better... also, her last movements could use some expression...