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Kung-Fu Lesson
by Gary Seto
Staring out her first lesson in style by being late!
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Timothy Muller
Hi there! I have a few recommendations that will help improve your work.
First, experiment more with your camera shots; you broke the 180-Rule from "... tomorrow at mid-day." to the end which causes confusion.
Second, counter actions. The teacher at the beginning bends backwards, so the hips should push forward in order to maintain balance.
Third, eyes. The girl's are ok (maybe a blink or two, and some pupil dilation if possible), but teachers are a bit bug-eyed.
Keep up the good work.
Erin Goddard
Careful of your jumpy cameras at the beginning. it is a bit disorienting. Nice throw of the glasses. keep working! :)
Jennifer Kirchhoefel
That jump cut near the start does not work. If you want to do a cut like that you need to make sure your character is in the same position otherwise it just confuses your audience and pulls them out of the video.