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YOU WILL BE!!!
A man is ready to be trained but the master doesn't think he is ready yet.
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Isaac Bautista
The green guy does appear on camera in the first scene but he doesn't move at all.
The human doesn't move much, he's pretty static. Try making him express himself with more body language.
The green guy opens his mouth before the "yeah" sound comes out. His smile at the end snaps wide really fast, it should transition a little more slowly, you could try slowly getting to that shape during the "be" dialogue.
Sabrina Winkel
I love this one it's probably the best out of the 220 i've seen!! I love how the character kneels down
William Barry Eggington
Well done.
Lady Musician
A background would have been nice. Everything else is okay, but you can tell it needs some polish (editing trolls armour).
John Fielding
would have been better had you not done the dolly move on the first shot. This is an animation competition and you blocked all of your animation. Not to mention, I totally thought it was a statue because the green guy wasn't moving at all until a few frames into the second shot, which also has a pointless zoom in. If you're gonna do camera stuff, keep it simple and clean. For the second shot, just cut to the wide you have, don't truck in, then around frame 223ish cut in close on the green guys face to emphasize his line
Jo Anne Tan
The animation isn't bad, I enjoyed the animation of the troll. But why do you have to make the camera move in the first shot? It didn't serve any purpose other than to distract and to obscure the man, and it also ends on an unappealing framing with so much dead space onscreen.