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Language of Letting Go
by Jed B.
An young janitor wants to show what he's got.
Comments
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Dominic Rayner
Animation great effort, but the story doesn't tell. If I was crafting this, I would have the guy struggling to pull the plunger in the toilet bowl, because I guess the monster has blocked it?? The plunger stuck to the floor, and the book reading seems irrelevant. You lost a gag which could have had me laughing.
Isaac Bautista
At around 240 the monster's right arm drops too fast and his left elbow pops a bit when grabbing the book.
Maybe an acting choise but I think the blond guy shouldn't lift his head until his dialogue starts.
Pretty good overall!
William Barry Eggington
Ha. Plunger. Good excuse for some nice motion/weight. Monster isn't as well animated as the guy.
J.K. Riki
I like it! I'd cut the final cut and last reaction, it isn't needed. Nice concept!
Jo Anne Tan
Not bad, but there could be a stronger sense of weight throughout your animation. Also the plunger needs to release from the floor much quicker and snappier, it now looks too rubbery and jellylike.