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Cowboy with moustache
by Jonah Chai
Beginneer student, about 6 month experience
took me 3 weeks but 72 hours in total, might be more
A dead cowboy giving a pep talk to a boy.
This is first for me, I had fun making this. Hope y'all enjoy it.
Would appreciate critics for camera techniques for this scene.
Comments
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Rhys Davey
Hold the pose at f20 for longer then slowly reach his for his back at f36. That would antic the lean in and give more emotion to '...this moment is...'
We often feel like we have to move the character all the time but never underestimate what you can do with a simple pause.
Renell Test
I like the body mechanics of your submission, and that you paid about equal attention to both characters. I would put more attention on Ray's facial expressions and Malcolm's lipsync so they do not seem as stiff. You can also continue to clean up the movements of the fingers. Continue to work on this, otherwise great job!
Ben Zingo
the reach at 33 feels too fast, you could spread it out or even delay entirely until he leans in at 53.
Also double check the timing for emphasis on "this moment is", and make sure you include overshoot/settle when he leans back (same for "right here right now") make sure you're adding in those subtle overshoots for polish.
Overall, nice work!