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First Flight
I'm an animation student on my 4th semester
about a week
I decided to animate this exchange as two pilots on a plane.
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Richard Clark
Love the character designs!! However, some of the poses could be better. Like the right wrist on the younger pilot at the beginning looks broken. Also, his same hand at around 158 looks strange...like it's too extreme on his fingers. Then there's the motion of the older pilot on "Don't touch me"... what is he doing? Is he slapping the younger pilot? Why does the motion slow down? I'm a little confused by that. Lastly the younger pilot's arm at the end after he lifts if off the fist from the older pilot...why the strange motion on that? Wow...the plane going down...haha!
Sam Hughes
Try not to leave a character perfectly still when they're not doing anything, as it removes the life from them. Try some breathing or a blink.
~110: The word "questions" looks a bit off, try not having the tongue be as prominant, as the full sentence doesn't include much of it.
Otherwise, the animation is really fluid and easy to follow, in terms of movement. Good job! Also, love the ending haha
David S. Rodriguez
Good, but still in the pencil phase. Still, good job.