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After Jordan Brown is sent home for yet another school incident, his frustrated father Al Smith scolds him at the kitchen table, unaware that this time Jordan’s behavior will bring real consequences.
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Tessa Schrock
The start is a bit unclear, it looks as if the child is the one who is speaking but his mouth is not moving. For the sake of clarity, I would have the father in the first shot speaking so we know who is supposed to be talking. The shots should stay on the father a bit longer, because it feels a bit jumpy at times.
Could use improvement, but it is a good start.