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Little Secrets
There's a witch, a cat, and a box.
What's on the box? No idea
Comments
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Joshua Eton
This isn’t bad but I feel like a better choice of design could help liven the movement for the story’s concept. So I’d add better 3D model and more principles/ dynamics.
Moses Justin Ginaba
Good
Dante
The body language poses could be better timed. It should move with some weight and feel like it coincides with the words she's putting emphasis on.
Richard Clark
The camera cuts could be better. I feel it's a bit disconnected at the beginning with the lid coming down and then seeing the female character in the next shot. Then the camera shot at frame 356 happens too quick to register for the viewer. I would start the camera on her extreme closeup right at the beginning of her saying "secrets" and have her turn her head when she says it like you have at frame 361. Also, the first camera shot, you don't need all of that beginning. You just need his reaction, but if you keep that in, I would cut to another camera shot before the lid comes down to show the female's hand coming in to shut it. Aside from the camera stuff, the male's hand opening the lid is anchored to the lid...looks IKish. I also think the female character lacks polish. Some of the motion on it needs support from the lower body more.