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What is wrong with you?

by Vanni Alessio De Pieri

Final Rating: 2.97. Finished #201 out of 231 entries.

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Experience

moderate, student

Time Taken

3 weeks

Description

my entry for this month of 11 second club

Comments

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Lea

Try not to do a frontal staging next time, a 3/4 staging is much better for this kind of shot.

Adrian Winchell

Wow, you've got massive anticipation on here - much more than you need. Watch your timing and arcs when he reaches for the sausage - it seems a bit choppy there.

Lucas Donaldson

You can tell what's happening and what the character is thinking which is great. what may need to happen next is for there to be some fluidity of motion so it look natural.

Sabrina Winkel

I like the hand gestures and the part when he throws the sausage over his shoulder