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A coffee to talk
by veronica
He invites her to talk but she leaves him speechless
First time partecipating, I know there are a lot of errors but if you have critique or advice I'm happy to hear it!
Comments
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Johann Wong
Looks really floaty & all over the place, especially the guy. Tighten up the overall timing & you'll be fine. :)
Scott
She is statue still in the beginning then springs to life. Make sure you have some moving holds on your characters like you do him on the reverse shot.
Andrew DiLullo
Key poses are good, but the timing on everything is way too even. Try putting in some pauses and holds.
Adam Maier
A bit too much movement in the head/neck
Luke Coleman
The mans movements are good. The womans hand and finger motions are a bit too clunkys and her starting pose before she talks is too static.
A F
Great animation! I think her lip-syncing could still use a little bit more work, though.
Felipe Navarro
Great job, maybe I'm nitpicking, but the arm movement of the guy on frame 75, when he slides his hand, throws me off. Other than that, it is great.
Thomas Thoma
It's staged right. Good acting choices and some great poses there! Nice. It needs a bit of refinement, some smoothing. The guy moves his spine in a weird way and there's bumpy movement.