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The Heist
2 voleurs se retrouvent sur un toit après un braquage.
Une embrouille éclate entre eux.
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Isaiah Hoeninghaus
At the start it's a little unclear where the characters are in relation to one another. If you started the female character's dialogue with the male character in the shot it would help establish their positions.
Shaun Bartoo
Wow, this is wacky. This feels like almost a joke submission, but if you want serious feedback, you've got wayyy too many poses in here. Think about having one pose per phrase and acting within that pose so that we actually have time to read whats happening. Thank you though, this was very entertaining
David Fliesen
Just too odd. Better to stick with a story and use motions that the audience can read rather than jerking them all over the place haphazardly.